I almost never use the notes I’ve previously made on a fic in the comments I make on that fic if it comes up at the book club, because my opinions on a fic often change over time and I always want to be going with a fresh impression. However, in this case I find that my original impression of this fic sums up my current impression of it almost exactly:

"***This is a pretty good casefile fic. The details are a little patchy and I spent most of the fic trying to figure out how one plot element was related to another, but all in all, as a casefile it plays out very similar to the show in its pacing, tone and the way it approaches the characters and their relationship. A more fleshed out plot and a more character-based narrative (the latter especially) would have given it more impact. But I’m not sure that's what the author was going for."

I'm not sure what exactly Alloway was going for. This fic has a lot of good material in it, yet it feels a bit stilted to me. It never quite gels. I’ll try to go into a bit more detail tomorrow.