Has anyone noticed the sly reference to James Joyce in 'chapter' 11, where Mulder mentions attending a Joyce seminar while at Oxford? I had a 'Eureka!" moment at that point and wondered whether the author was subtly sign-posting her inspiration for the Mulder "stream-of-consciousness" narrative (less obvious in the early parts, but more noticeable later on in the story). If that was a hint of what she was attempting to emulate I thought she did partially succeed with her noticeable lack of punctuation in places, and long, rambling, slightly disjointed sentences. I thought this was quite effective.
On the subject of this fic focusing heavily on Mulder's thoughts/state of mind, I'd like start by positioning myself firmly on the Mulder side of the fence here. I do love Mulder-centric stuff because as I've said before, I am a Mulderist, but also a shipper (sorry Wendy) so a huge part of me really enjoyed reading him as a love-struck, 'pile of mush' ; I suppose that secretly I hope deep down that maybe, just maybe, this might be an accurate insight into Mulder's actual thoughts at each stage of his relationship with Scully. It made me want to go and have a mini-rewatch of some of these scenes all over again in the light of this interpretation. However, that said, I did shudder a little at the rather too familiar, over-used fanfic trope of Angst!Mulder and his over-active guilt complex. I just can't quite see where fanfic writers got this idea from but it pops up everywhere in fanfic, almost as if it is based on actual canon (fanon more like!). I've watched the whole 9 Seasons over several times and I just don't see this guilt-tripping, "I'm such a bad person" Mulder to any great significance in the show itself, so I wonder where this trope originates from, and - oh dear, now it's here too, in this otherwise excellent story. However, despite the criticism, I did still greatly enjoy reading this and re-reading it a second time was a pleasure. Great choice.