Well, I've been a shameless Shipper since 1998 but I still think this story would have been better off without the MSR. It is a lovely idea for a fic but the MSR felt tacked on and unnecessary.
Mulder drives the car further and further from civilization, whistling tunelessly through his teeth. Scully sits beside him, thinking how much she dislikes surprises. Neither speaks.
Lovely rhythm and description there.
"Is it haunted?" Of course she would ask. Eeh.
Unbidden, a vision of blood sacrifice to the hungry trees' roots floats before her.
Nice way of showing how Scully's mind is affected by the kind of cases the X-Files division deals with. They can't just be harmless trees with apples. It says a lot about the warped perception Scully has reached by that stage. She opened herself to extreme possibilities but in doing so everything around her has become a potential threat, even something as seemingly harmless as an apple tree. It could have been a sarcastic thought, mind you, but it didn't come across this way. She shakes her head like she doesn't want to have these kind of thoughts, but she's bonded to Mulder's nightmarish world now and there's no escape.
However, the "I've been thinking" exchange felt a tad pedestrian for my taste and as I said before, the MSR felt redundant.
Voila. :)
ETA: why is it I only notice typos once I've hit 'send'! Grrrr.
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Mulder drives the car further and further from civilization, whistling tunelessly through his teeth. Scully sits beside him, thinking how much she dislikes surprises. Neither speaks.
Lovely rhythm and description there.
"Is it haunted?" Of course she would ask. Eeh.
Unbidden, a vision of blood sacrifice to the hungry trees' roots floats before her.
Nice way of showing how Scully's mind is affected by the kind of cases the X-Files division deals with. They can't just be harmless trees with apples. It says a lot about the warped perception Scully has reached by that stage. She opened herself to extreme possibilities but in doing so everything around her has become a potential threat, even something as seemingly harmless as an apple tree. It could have been a sarcastic thought, mind you, but it didn't come across this way. She shakes her head like she doesn't want to have these kind of thoughts, but she's bonded to Mulder's nightmarish world now and there's no escape.
However, the "I've been thinking" exchange felt a tad pedestrian for my taste and as I said before, the MSR felt redundant.
Voila. :)
ETA: why is it I only notice typos once I've hit 'send'! Grrrr.