I'm such a sucker for beautiful language. But these two aside, the characterization has to ring true or I just can't get through it.
See I love pretty language too, but I think it should be used parsimoniously, otherwise it becomes too distracting, and I'm pulled out of the story. You're going to be more stunned by the one perfect lily in a garden than if you're surrounded by hundreds of them.
One of the issues I had with Iolokus was the overuse of metaphors at times. Some were very striking but the impact was lost because there was another one right on the heels of the previous one.
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Date: 2009-10-31 08:11 am (UTC)See I love pretty language too, but I think it should be used parsimoniously, otherwise it becomes too distracting, and I'm pulled out of the story. You're going to be more stunned by the one perfect lily in a garden than if you're surrounded by hundreds of them.
One of the issues I had with Iolokus was the overuse of metaphors at times. Some were very striking but the impact was lost because there was another one right on the heels of the previous one.