This is weird, because I don't like the last scene that much, either. The first time I read this fic (and the second, and the third) I absolutely loved it uncritically. This time, I started to think why there are parts that don't work as well as others for me.
First, I think the second part is totally unnecessary as part of this fic, and that is the best written of the three. To me it's like Tesla was trying out doing away with (some) transitions, and in the second part is were this just works. The other parts (uhm, at least the third, as I can't remember now any on the first) have some moments where the story jumps around and I suddenly don't know where I am.
Also, this time I noted the hero worship. The only thing that makes it endurable is that it's not there when it's Mulder's pov. Also, the characterizations were a bit... on the service of the (a bit contrived) plot, I guess. I don't think I'm convinced by their fights most of the time.
That said, it still works--it's very well-written.
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Better late than never, right?
Date: 2010-04-28 11:56 am (UTC)First, I think the second part is totally unnecessary as part of this fic, and that is the best written of the three. To me it's like Tesla was trying out doing away with (some) transitions, and in the second part is were this just works. The other parts (uhm, at least the third, as I can't remember now any on the first) have some moments where the story jumps around and I suddenly don't know where I am.
Also, this time I noted the hero worship. The only thing that makes it endurable is that it's not there when it's Mulder's pov. Also, the characterizations were a bit... on the service of the (a bit contrived) plot, I guess. I don't think I'm convinced by their fights most of the time.
That said, it still works--it's very well-written.