This expresses all my thoughts about the fic perfectly. Yes, it's well written on a technical level, and the smut biscuit is a hot one indeed. But the "AU" label is not enough for me to get around some problems of characterization. I'll give credit to the good presentation of their mannerisms and their mental and physical environments, but the roots and the results of their anger at each other strike me as very much off. It's the kind of piece that has me thinking, "This has its good points, but why has the author named her OCs after such widely known TV characters?" Then again, it could just be my ultimate dissatisfaction with the fic colouring my point of view... Bottom line: I suppose I would characterize "On a Star-Spangled Night" as a not-very-good fic that I guiltily enjoyed reading, "Bitter Taste" is a good-on-a-formal-level fic that I really don't like.
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Date: 2010-07-17 09:20 pm (UTC)