Part 11: Okay, so Jordan (or at least her writing) seems to suffer from a case of Mulder worship. "His angst! His passion! His strength of will!" It wouldn't bother me if only Jordan had let Scully be as strong and passionate as Mulder.
Resistance is futile.
Not a good line to use in a scene where Mulder forcefully embraces Scully. It doesn't come across as passionate, just rapey.
Part 12: I actually quite like the sex scene. The descriptions of orgasm are annoyingly OTT, but the first three quarters of the scene is lovely. It's not very hot, I agree, but then I really don't think it's supposed to be particularly hot - not in a blatant "turn the reader on" kind of way. It's sensual and emotional.
but the cucumber thing did make me roll my eyes. It's a little hot, but mostly just silly.
I love the little scene after, though, where Mulder notices Scully is wounded, and she begins to tell him about the case, and finally the two storylines are connected.
Part 13: I think this was the weakest section. I'd say Jordan's strong point is not action sequences. I don't think that TTF was particularly unfair to Diana's character but I don't think she was characterized very well either. I would have loved it if Jeffrey had fainted instead, while Diana had at least trained her gun on the creature or something.
And why couldn't Scully's lighter have worked? She came on the scene like a total HBIC, and then she was robbed of her moment of ultimate capability because the lighter didn't work? Boo.
Part 6: I really wish this chapter didn't exist. I like Scully's "Oh, I get it. You decided my future for me while I was unconscious. Did I forget to thank you?" and Mulder's "I owe you everything. But I wasn't in much of a position to do any repaying, was I?" But I prefer the way it reads without part 6. I'm having kind of a hard time incorporating it into my concept of the story. Oy, reader fail.
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Date: 2011-11-05 05:59 am (UTC)Resistance is futile.
Not a good line to use in a scene where Mulder forcefully embraces Scully. It doesn't come across as passionate, just rapey.
Part 12: I actually quite like the sex scene. The descriptions of orgasm are annoyingly OTT, but the first three quarters of the scene is lovely. It's not very hot, I agree, but then I really don't think it's supposed to be particularly hot - not in a blatant "turn the reader on" kind of way. It's sensual and emotional.
but the cucumber thing did make me roll my eyes. It's a little hot, but mostly just silly.
I love the little scene after, though, where Mulder notices Scully is wounded, and she begins to tell him about the case, and finally the two storylines are connected.
Part 13: I think this was the weakest section. I'd say Jordan's strong point is not action sequences. I don't think that TTF was particularly unfair to Diana's character but I don't think she was characterized very well either. I would have loved it if Jeffrey had fainted instead, while Diana had at least trained her gun on the creature or something.
And why couldn't Scully's lighter have worked? She came on the scene like a total HBIC, and then she was robbed of her moment of ultimate capability because the lighter didn't work? Boo.
Part 6: I really wish this chapter didn't exist. I like Scully's "Oh, I get it. You decided my future for me while I was unconscious. Did I forget to thank you?" and Mulder's "I owe you everything. But I wasn't in much of a position to do any repaying, was I?" But I prefer the way it reads without part 6. I'm having kind of a hard time incorporating it into my concept of the story. Oy, reader fail.