Hi, late again. I liked this story. It had many strengths. It was well-plotted, the secondary characters were convincing (medical examiner without a sense of smell, heh), and considering I'm totally over serial killers it held my attention. And Ophelia's concepts of Mulder's and Scully's characters were mainly consistent with mine. He flirts; he won't allow himself to mean it; she plays counselor and comforter. Although I quite disliked the tearful quaking in his partner's arms in his skivvies that decorated the denouement. The influence of Oklahoma repels me.
Although there is wit in the author's commentaries I feel that the banter seems a bit, what?, maybe *raw.* It's probably a result of taking the ship so for granted after twenty years or whatever, but when Mulder gets funny here I just can't hear sly DD saying it. "I've gotten lucky already...."Not that way." "Alt.sex.FBI.redheads." Keeping his knowledge of French secret from "the French people'? It all sounds pretty high-school awkward. However, when M tells S that he owes her, her "I'll put it on your tab" rings true. Scully deserved better lines than she got.
Sorry to sound so critical. I really thought it was a respectable effort, and I'd never run across it before.
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Date: 2013-01-18 02:42 pm (UTC)Although there is wit in the author's commentaries I feel that the banter seems a bit, what?, maybe *raw.* It's probably a result of taking the ship so for granted after twenty years or whatever, but when Mulder gets funny here I just can't hear sly DD saying it. "I've gotten lucky already...."Not that way." "Alt.sex.FBI.redheads." Keeping his knowledge of French secret from "the French people'? It all sounds pretty high-school awkward. However, when M tells S that he owes her, her "I'll put it on your tab" rings true. Scully deserved better lines than she got.
Sorry to sound so critical. I really thought it was a respectable effort, and I'd never run across it before.