But. There are just too many words for the amount of content. Lots and lots of descriptive language. I have never read so many adjectives in one place that mean red/brown/blue/hazel in the context of hair and eyes. I guess all this description is supposed to help create atmosphere...the storm, the romance, the weird cross-over with their "other" lives, but it's just overdone.
It's way overdone. The descriptive language is mostly detracting from the story she's trying to tell. That's obvious just from reading the prologue.
I agree that she's trying to create atmosphere. It's not working, except for the physical descriptions of Charleston and even those could have been tightened up.
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Date: 2014-04-04 11:00 pm (UTC)It's way overdone. The descriptive language is mostly detracting from the story she's trying to tell. That's obvious just from reading the prologue.
I agree that she's trying to create atmosphere. It's not working, except for the physical descriptions of Charleston and even those could have been tightened up.