Sexuality is so individual, and people's responses to erotica so unpredictable, I'm not sure how this helps but okay.
It does help, in a way. I see now that many of the segments you find awkward are segments I find sensual and passionate. We can chalk this one up to very different subjective views on eroticism.
But I think Jordan wanted more clarity and the narrative just got away from her. I think if she'd had more time to edit, it would have had better flow and probably better metaphors, too.
This is probably true. Though I'd rather this fic be more impressionistic and less straight-forwardly plotty, I suppose that's entirely a matter of personal taste. The extreme requirments put on this fic by the challenge aspect of it, and it's seasonal nature, went into my evaluation of the finished product. I considered it better and more fascinating because it coped with the challenge so well. But if one were to consider the fic regardless of the challenge restrictions, its weaknesses would be far less forgivable. I'd simply never thought to consider it that way.
BTW, this was a very fair response to my previous comment, which was a little prickly. When I read this fic I saw its strengths and overlooked its weaknesses. Everyone else seemed to be overlooking its strengths and seeing its weaknesses. After the warm response to "Other Night", which I felt was merely an endearing trifle in comparison to the ambition and uniqueness of this piece, I was feeling a little out of sorts. Having one of those "fandom and I don't get each other" moments. Being a bad sport.
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Re: 2/3
Date: 2011-11-10 11:25 pm (UTC)It does help, in a way. I see now that many of the segments you find awkward are segments I find sensual and passionate. We can chalk this one up to very different subjective views on eroticism.
But I think Jordan wanted more clarity and the narrative just got away from her. I think if she'd had more time to edit, it would have had better flow and probably better metaphors, too.
This is probably true. Though I'd rather this fic be more impressionistic and less straight-forwardly plotty, I suppose that's entirely a matter of personal taste. The extreme requirments put on this fic by the challenge aspect of it, and it's seasonal nature, went into my evaluation of the finished product. I considered it better and more fascinating because it coped with the challenge so well. But if one were to consider the fic regardless of the challenge restrictions, its weaknesses would be far less forgivable. I'd simply never thought to consider it that way.
BTW, this was a very fair response to my previous comment, which was a little prickly. When I read this fic I saw its strengths and overlooked its weaknesses. Everyone else seemed to be overlooking its strengths and seeing its weaknesses. After the warm response to "Other Night", which I felt was merely an endearing trifle in comparison to the ambition and uniqueness of this piece, I was feeling a little out of sorts. Having one of those "fandom and I don't get each other" moments. Being a bad sport.